Fix 'em up!

Original Introduction Paragraph: 

 In the poem "Barbie Doll" by Marge Piercy, Piercy uses symbols such as miniature ovens, crying babies, red lipstick, and the image of a big nose and fat legs to demonstrate how the belittling of an average girl can lead to serious unfortunate events. The fact that the girlchild grows up playing with miniature GE stoves and whining babies symbolizes how from the beginning, the girlchild is categorized into a strict, motherly class. The red lipstick plays with the idea of how the girl is trying to fit into the cookie cutter "Barbie Doll" image that she is expected to portray. The image of a big nose and fat legs is also important in helping Piercy demonstrate the environment that the girlchild grows up in, always striving to be something other than herself. In the end, all of the bullying causes the girlchild to take matters into her own hands. She ends up cutting off her legs and nose, obviously resulting in her death. It is evident that symbols are used in the poem "Barbie Doll" to help illustrate the image that young girls feel they need to fulfill in order to be socially accepted.    

Revised Introduction: 

  In the poem "Barbie Doll", Piercy uses symbols such as miniature ovens, crying babies, red lipstick, and the image of a big nose and fat legs to demonstrate how the belittling of an average girl can lead to serious unfortunate events. The fact that the girlchild grows up playing with miniature GE stoves and baby dolls symbolizes how from the beginning, the girlchild is forced to follow expectations of what a woman should be. The red lipstick plays with the idea of how the girl is trying to fit into the cookie cutter "Barbie Doll" image that she is expected to portray. The image of a big nose and fat legs is also important in helping Piercy demonstrate the environment where the girlchild grows up striving to be something other than herself. In the end, all of the criticism that the girlchild endures causes her to take matters into her own hands and cut off her nose and legs. Symbols are used in "Barbie Doll" to help illustrate the image that young girls feel they need to fulfill in order to be socially accepted.